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Mar. 12th, 2010 12:32 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
Hah. Ok, proofreaders, or anyone who just likes watching me shove a stick into a hornet's nest- anyone want to check this thing over before I send it?
Jack Saltzman/Chicago Game & Card Company-
Given your hidden charges for pre-press work; your inability/unwillingness to provide any proof or assurance of quality before payment is rendered; your rather exorbitant rates for production; your lack of professional syntax, grammar, or basic capitalization in emails; and your inability to even remember the name of your customer's product after seeing mention of it in filenames, web pages, and other locations, I've decided to take my business to another printing company. I've taken the liberty of removing my files from your ftp server, please destroy any other copies you may have of them.
Sincerely,
Dmitri Arbacauskas
Owner/Artist
Tormented Artifacts, ltd.
The scary part is? That's probably only two thirds of the reasons why I'm dissatisfied with them. Seriously- game designers on here, word of warning- do not take your business to these guys. The deck's already with another company and halfway through prepress now.
Jack Saltzman/Chicago Game & Card Company-
Given your hidden charges for pre-press work; your inability/unwillingness to provide any proof or assurance of quality before payment is rendered; your rather exorbitant rates for production; your lack of professional syntax, grammar, or basic capitalization in emails; and your inability to even remember the name of your customer's product after seeing mention of it in filenames, web pages, and other locations, I've decided to take my business to another printing company. I've taken the liberty of removing my files from your ftp server, please destroy any other copies you may have of them.
Sincerely,
Dmitri Arbacauskas
Owner/Artist
Tormented Artifacts, ltd.
The scary part is? That's probably only two thirds of the reasons why I'm dissatisfied with them. Seriously- game designers on here, word of warning- do not take your business to these guys. The deck's already with another company and halfway through prepress now.
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Date: 2010-03-12 08:51 pm (UTC)though given the content of this e-mail, they'll probably wonder why you only put the first half of all those Winkies in ;-)
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Date: 2010-03-12 09:14 pm (UTC)/slow-motion run to keep Dmitri away from the "Send" button
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Date: 2010-03-12 09:20 pm (UTC)http://www.essortment.com/all/semicolon_rcnr.htm
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Date: 2010-03-12 09:40 pm (UTC)Wait. You mean by that that you love the serial comma and would never give up using it as all good people should, right?
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Date: 2010-03-12 09:33 pm (UTC)And after I deleted it, I considered the fact that some of the clauses in his list contain "comma lists", which would call for a semicolon for differentiation. However, normally, that is used when the list is consistently full of commas, (like: "I went to Seattle, Washington; Portland, Oregon; and Astoria, Oregon on my vacation.") and the semicolons are necessary for differentiation. Here, only 2 of the clauses contain "comma lists" and they are so far into the sentence that their existence really gets lost and the use of the semicolons screams wrong.
After thinking about it, I think the issue boils down the fact that it is an overlong, overwrought sentence, and the solution is to break it up. Bullet points are an excellent way to do it. The list could also be incorporated by starting the sentence with: "I am taking my business to another printing company because: 1. blah blah blah; 2. blah, blah, blah; 3. etc." and the semicolons would read as much, much more appropriate.
~Aramada
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Date: 2010-03-12 09:38 pm (UTC)I do agree that the first semicolon struck me as a bit off until I got down to the comma lists. Shorter sentences tend to be better in many cases, especially when upbraiding someone for being an idiot.
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